I like books that can be reread. If the words do only one thing, you read them, and if everything you write is transparent, then there's nothing left to be discovered on rereading.
This isn't relevant criticism for you - anyone who writes 'the early sunlight dripped onto her shivering head like milk that had been down the well for a week' does not suffer from a lack of specific detail pulling its weight, nor would I call it overly generic. (In fact, I am trying to find a sensation that *I* can relate to in this, and I'm failing - iIt works in the context, it just wouldn't have occurred to me to write this.)
For me, making scenes and events work harder was good advice because this way I can pack more story into the same amount of words.
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Date: 2011-01-03 11:26 am (UTC)This isn't relevant criticism for you - anyone who writes 'the early sunlight dripped onto her shivering head like milk that had been down the well for a week' does not suffer from a lack of specific detail pulling its weight, nor would I call it overly generic. (In fact, I am trying to find a sensation that *I* can relate to in this, and I'm failing - iIt works in the context, it just wouldn't have occurred to me to write this.)
For me, making scenes and events work harder was good advice because this way I can pack more story into the same amount of words.